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The chart shows striking differences in the level of computer and Internet penetration in the Arab world.

The chart shows striking differences in the level of computer and Internet penetration in the Arab world. xaB8g
The bar graph information about computers and internet ( per 1. 000 inhabitants) in the Arap 9 differents cities. Overall, it is clear that most highest used internet per 1000 inhabitans with UAE while, was the lowest user computer per 1000 habitants in Syria. According to bar graph, was the use of internet highest number of almost with 350. 000 in the UAE. Followed by, Kuwait with 100. 000, Lebonan with aproximately 75. 000, Oman with about 45. 000, Jordan with around 40. 000, respectively. After that, Egypth, Moroca and S. Arabia had some percentages with roughly 20. 000. All these cities in the Syria was the lowest percentages of using internet with around 5. 000. When it comes to computers ( per 1. 000 inhabitants ) firstly with around 155. 000 persons had computers in the UAE. Secondly with about 130. 000 persons in Kuwait, thirdly with around 60. 000 persons in S. Arabia, fourdly with 50. 000 persons in with around 40. 000 persons in Lebonan. Followed by, Oman with around 45. 000 persons, Jordan with around 40. 000 persons, S. Arabia with around 20. 000 persons, Egypth with around 10. 000 persons, respectively. In the conclusion, comparison with used of computers and internet it can be seen a lot of cities undeveloped in the Arap World.
The bar graph information about computers and internet
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Arap
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internet per 1000
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with UAE
while, was the lowest user computer per 1000 habitants in Syria.

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number of almost with 350. 000 in the UAE. Followed by, Kuwait with 100. 000,
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Lebonan
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aproximately
75. 000, Oman with about 45.
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percentages with roughly 20. 000. All these cities in the Syria was the lowest percentages of using internet with
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firstly
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155. 000
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had computers in the UAE.
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In the conclusion, comparison with
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of computers and internet it can be
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