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We can see from the graph that it provides information about the Iranian, Greek, Turkish learners who have migrated to Sheffield unviersity for studying, during the years 2005-2009. One of the first thing to notice is that Greece students are showing a

We can see from the graph that it provides information about the Iranian, Greek, Turkish learners who have migrated to Sheffield unviersity for studying, during the years 2005-2009. One of the first thing to notice is that Greece students are showing a 0aoDB
We can see from the graph that it provides information about the Iranian, Greek, Turkish learners who have migrated to Sheffield unviersity for studying, during the years 2005-2009. One of the first thing to notice is that Greece students are showing a downward fall whereas Iran and Turkeys students are increasing. A striking point to notice is that in the year 2005 learners from Greece are 180 when compared to Iran and Turkery at 40 and 20 respectively. There is a signifiant rise in the number of learners from the other two countries but the blue line shows a drop as we move towards 2006 and 2007. The green line is showing a gradual increase till 2008. It is generally true to say that green and red show a jump and a posotive rise till 2008 but after that year, number of people enrolling has seen a decline from Turkey. But migrates of Iran reach to 160 which is the highest number in 2009. Students enrolling in the courses depends on the fee and other vital factors. If there is a decilne numerous factors are to be blamed.
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from the graph that it provides information about the Iranian, Greek, Turkish learners who have migrated to Sheffield
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unviersity
for studying, during the years 2005-2009. One of the
first
thing to notice is that Greece students are showing a downward fall whereas Iran and Turkeys students are increasing.

A striking point to notice is that in the year 2005 learners from Greece are 180 when compared to Iran and
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Turkery
at 40 and 20
respectively
. There is a
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signifiant
rise in the number of learners from the other two countries
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the blue line
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shows
a drop as we
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move
towards 2006 and 2007. The green line is showing a gradual increase till 2008.

It is
generally
true to say that green and red
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show
a jump and a
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posotive
rise till 2008
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but
after that year, number of
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people
enrolling has
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seen
a decline from Turkey.
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But
migrates of Iran reach to 160 which is the highest number in 2009. Students enrolling in the courses depends on the fee and other vital factors.
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If
there is a
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decilne
numerous factors are to
be blamed
.

IELTS academic We can see from the graph that it provides information about the Iranian, Greek, Turkish learners who have migrated to Sheffield unviersity for studying, during the years 2005-2009. One of the first thing to notice is that Greece students are showing a

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