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water in Egypt, Saudi Arabia and Canada and utilisation

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Two pie charts provide data about worldwide water, while the graph provides information about water utilisation in Egypt, Saudi Arabia and Canada. Overall, it is clear that salty water covers the total area of the world, while fresh water mostly consists of ice. In southern countries, such as Egypt and Saudi Arabia, water resources are spent on agriculture, whereas, in Canada the most water uses for industrial spheres. Looking specifically at two charts, it is noticeable that 97% of water is salty water, while fresh water takes only 3% of all water resources of the planet, that consists mostly of iced water (70%), when other 30% take groundwater and easily accessible surface water with 20% and 10% respectively. According to the line graph, domestic water utilisation is the least popular in all three countries with about 25% in Canada and Egypt and more than 10% in Saudi Arabia. Agricultural expenditure of water is used mostly by Egyptians and Arabs citizens (approximately 65% and almost 80% respectively), whilst it takes only 10% for Canadians. On the contrary for Canada industrial water utilisation is the priority one with about 65%, while for other states it takes less than 10%.
Two pie charts provide data about worldwide
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, while the graph provides information about
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utilisation
in Egypt, Saudi Arabia and Canada.

Overall
, it is
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clear
that salty
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water
covers the total area of the world, while fresh
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water
mostly
consists of ice. In southern countries, such as Egypt and Saudi Arabia,
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water
resources
are spent
on agriculture, whereas, in Canada the most
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water
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uses
for industrial spheres.

Looking
specifically
at two charts, it is noticeable that 97% of
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is salty
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, while fresh
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takes
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only
3% of all
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water
resources of the planet, that consists
mostly
of iced
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water
(70%), when other 30% take groundwater and
easily
accessible surface
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water
with 20% and 10%
respectively
.

According to the line graph, domestic
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water
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utilisation
is the least popular in all three countries with about 25% in Canada and Egypt and more than 10% in Saudi Arabia. Agricultural expenditure of
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water
is
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used
mostly
by Egyptians and Arabs citizens (approximately 65% and almost 80%
respectively
), whilst it takes
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only
10% for Canadians.
On the contrary
for Canada industrial
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utilisation
is the priority one with about 65%, while for other states it takes less than 10%.
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IELTS academic water in Egypt, Saudi Arabia and Canada and utilisation

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