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The diagram below shows city park before and after the swimming pool was constructed.

The diagram below shows city park before and after the swimming pool was constructed. BlYep
The maps illustrate the changes that are made to the existing place of City Park in the installation of a new swimming pool. Overall, the construction of the swimming pool has caused a lot of significant changes in almost all over the place in City Park including the Basketball court whereas there isn’t any changes in entrance. The most noticeable change from the prior to and the following construction is that below the garden, to the south east of the city park, there has not been a parking lot which had been completely replaced by a new big swimming pool. A new parking lot has been replaced instead of the basketball court 2 which was situated beside the basketball court 1, in the north of the city park. In the south west of the city park, below basketball court 1, a parking lot remains unchanged. However, there had not been a small fountain in the garden to the north east which allows the garden to get a little more space. Finally, there are no changes in the basketball court 1, the entrance and the main park road.
The maps illustrate the
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changes
that
are made
to the existing place of City
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Park
in the

installation of a new swimming pool.
Overall
, the construction of the swimming pool has

caused
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a lot of
significant
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changes
in almost all over the place in City
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Park
including the

Basketball
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court
whereas there isn’t any
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changes
in entrance.

The most noticeable
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change
from the prior to and the following construction is that

below the garden, to the
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south east
of the city
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park
, there has not been a parking lot

which had been completely replaced by a new
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big
swimming pool. A new parking lot

has
been replaced
instead
of the basketball
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court
2 which
was situated
beside the

basketball
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court
1, in the north of the city park.

In the
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south west
of the city
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park
, below basketball
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court
1, a parking lot remains

unchanged.
However
, there had not been a
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small
fountain in the garden to the
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north east
which
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allows
the garden to
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get
a
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little
more space.
Finally
, there are no
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changes
in

the basketball
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court
1, the entrance and the main
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park
road.
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IELTS academic The diagram below shows city park before and after the swimming pool was constructed.

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