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Visitors to the local cinema according to age

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The provided pie chart compares the percentage of audiences of a local cinema from five different aged groups in 2000. Overall, what stands out from the pie chart is that the oldest group making up the largest proportion of visitors while the smallest percentage went on people aged 31-45. Looking at the pie chart in more detail, more than half of the number of residents going to a local cinema was people who are 55 and older. This figure was nearly two and a half times as high as that for the second-largest group, the youngest group People aged 31-45 were the least popular, accounting for 5%, which was a third of the figure for people in the 16-20 age group. The fourth compound shown in the chart is people who are from 21 to 30 years old. This group stood at 8% in total, becoming the second most popular group.
The provided pie
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compares the percentage of audiences of a local cinema from five
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aged
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in 2000.

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, what stands out from the pie
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is that the oldest
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making up the largest proportion of visitors while the smallest percentage went on
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aged 31-45.

Looking at the pie
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in more detail, more than half of the number of residents going to a local cinema was
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people
who are 55 and older. This figure was
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, the youngest group

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aged 31-45 were the least popular, accounting for 5%, which was a third of the figure for
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in the 16-20 age group.

The fourth compound shown in the
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is
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who are from 21 to 30 years
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. This
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stood at 8% in total, becoming the second most popular
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IELTS academic Visitors to the local cinema according to age

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