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The diagram below shows the layout of a new spa and fitness centre in Ottawa, Canada.

The diagram below shows the layout of a new spa and fitness centre in Ottawa, Canada. WY7jK
The diagram illustrates the interior design of a recently developed spa and fitness club in the city of Ottawa, Canada. Overall, several therapeutic facilities are included in this centre along with a gymnasium. First of all, upon entering the club, there is a reception desk with a couch for visitors. On the right side of entrance, is a large training room which is well-equipped with several sources of exercise such as, treadmills, multipurpose bench, dumbbell rack and so on. Just opposite the reception area, one can find a shower room as well as a dressing area. Adjacent to these, there is a massage room where people can relax and feel rejuvenated on the massage tables. On turning left from the entrance, there lies a washroom adjoining a solarium. This room includes three tanning beds which can be used to acquire an artificial suntan.
The diagram illustrates the interior design of a recently developed spa and fitness club in the city of Ottawa, Canada.
Overall
, several therapeutic facilities
are included
in this
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centre
along with a gymnasium.

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First of all
, upon entering the club, there is a reception desk with a couch for visitors. On the right side of entrance, is a large training
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room
which is well-equipped with several sources of exercise such as, treadmills, multipurpose bench, dumbbell rack and
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so
on.
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Just
opposite the reception area, one can find a shower
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room
as well
as a dressing area. Adjacent to these, there is a massage
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room
where
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
can relax and feel rejuvenated on the massage tables. On turning
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left
from the entrance, there lies a washroom adjoining a solarium. This
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room
includes three tanning beds which can be
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used
to acquire an artificial suntan.
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IELTS academic The diagram below shows the layout of a new spa and fitness centre in Ottawa, Canada.

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  American English
2 paragraphs
143 words
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