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Use of Bicycle by different age groups and gender over a span of 25 years.

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The table illustrates the outcomes of a 25-year old study on the distance travelled using bicycles by people of different age groups and gender in Britain. It clearly depicts that men tend to cover distances using bicycles more than women. The distance travelled per person per year shows an overall downward trend for all the groups. The highest number of miles are covered by children aged 11-17 years throughout all the years as compared to the rest of the categories. The only age group that showed an increase towards the end of a 25-year span is girls between 5-10 years. The figure for people above 60 years shows 29 miles covered annually per person in year 1 before falling to 15 miles in the 25th year. To conclude, people have travelled fewer and fewer miles on bicycles especially females whose trend is far less than that of males. All cyclists covered 51 miles in 1st year and dropped to just 38 miles in the 25th year.
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IELTS academic Use of Bicycle by different age groups and gender over a span of 25 years.

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3 paragraphs
166 words
6.0
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