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The table shows the Proportions of Pupils Attending Four Secondary School Types Between Between 2000 and 2009. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The table shows the Proportions of Pupils Attending Four Secondary School Types Between Between 2000 and 2009. y6LD
The table illustrates the percentage of school children attending four different types of secondary school from 2000 to 2009. It is evident that whereas the community schools experienced a marked increase in the proportion of those attending their institutions over the period, the others saw a corresponding decline. To begin, the percentage of pupils in voluntary-controlled schools fell from just over half to only 20% or one-fifth from 2000 to 2009. Similarly, the relative number of children in grammar schools - just under one quarter - dropped by half in the same period. As for the specialist schools, the relatively small percentage of pupils attending this type of school (12%) also fell, although not significantly. However, while the other three types of school declined in importance, the opposite was true in the case of community schools. In fact, whereas only a small minority of 12% were educated in these schools in 2000, this figure increased to well over half of all pupils during the following nine years.
The table illustrates the percentage of
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children attending four
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types of secondary
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from 2000 to 2009. It is evident that whereas the community
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experienced a marked increase in the proportion of those attending their institutions over the period, the others
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a corresponding decline.

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, the percentage of pupils in voluntary-controlled
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fell from
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over half to
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20% or one-fifth from 2000 to 2009.
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under one quarter
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dropped by half in the same period. As for the specialist
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, the
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percentage of pupils attending this type of
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(12%)
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declined in importance, the opposite was true in the case of community
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minority of 12%
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in 2000, this figure increased to well over half of all pupils during the following nine years.
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IELTS academic The table shows the Proportions of Pupils Attending Four Secondary School Types Between Between 2000 and 2009.

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