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Overpopulation of urban areas has led to numerous problems. Identify one or two serious ones and suggest ways that governments and individuals can tackle these problems.

Overpopulation of urban areas has led to numerous problems. Identify one or two serious ones and suggest ways that governments and individuals can tackle these problems. PeLw
The table illustrates the number of people from three different age groups worked in various employment sectors. people between age group 18 to 25, 25 to 40 and 40 to 65 has been taken into account. Overall, considering irrespective of age group, manufacturing is the largest employment sector summing up to a total of 50 members and accountancy turns out to be the lowest employment sector where a total of only 8 people worked in it. It is evident from the graph that between the age group 18-25 accountancy is least employed sector with 3 members and retail sector is the highest employed sector with 23 members working in it. Considering the second age group 25-40, the least employed sector is accountancy with only 2 members in it and manufacturing and health sectors can be considered as the second highest employed sector with 15 members and there are about 18 members employed in other sectors. Finally, in the age group between 40-65, the highest employed sector is manufacturing which accounts to 23 members and the least employed sector is accountancy with 3 members.
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IELTS academic Overpopulation of urban areas has led to numerous problems. Identify one or two serious ones and suggest ways that governments and individuals can tackle these problems.

Academic
  American English
12 paragraphs
183 words
5.5
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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.0
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