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unpaid hours of men and women

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The diagram indicates hours of unpaid work per week in three different categories done by married man and woman. In general, we can see that married women have an overwhelming majority of unpaid hours than men. As we can see from the diagram, married women without children have 30 hours of unpaid work per week. Married women with 1-2 children have 52 hours of unpaid work, while women with 3+ children have a bit more hours of unpaid work(55) and this is the best figure in this diagram. Turning to the married men, we can see that in all three categories hours of unpaid work were approximately the same. Men without children have a bit more hours of unpaid work than married men with 1-2 and 3+ children. In conclusion, we can see that females have more hours of unpaid work than males. In addition, in all 3 categories men have approximately same hours of unpaid work.
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from the diagram, married
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and this is the best figure in this diagram.

Turning to the married
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IELTS academic unpaid hours of men and women

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4 paragraphs
157 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.0
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