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Olympic games partisipants from 1924 to 2016

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The bar chat gives information about the number of men and women athletes who has entered to four Olympic games from 1924 to 2012. and the line graph shows the total number of participants in the same competitions. Both charts show a surge in number of athletes in total as well as both genders. Based on line plot, the sum total of participants in 2012 were more than 10, 000 which was five times more than they were in 1924. In another hand, from the bar chart, we know that despite of the slight and steady increase of men athletes during this period, which has became double from 3000 at the beginning, the number of female athletes rocketed and has risen dramatically from almost 100 in 1924 to near 5000 in 2016 which was just about 1500 less than male participants. Overall, whereas the number of female athletes in the Olympic games were always fewer than men in this period, more and more women athletes could enter the to the competitions in every game. So, in spite of masculine Olympics in 1924, we can consider that 2012 games was belonged to the both genders.

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