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The provided bar graph is reflect variation number of telephone call by The British. According of the bar graph are separating into 3 groups: local -fixed line, national and International- fixed line and mobiles. After analysis that graph, mobiles gradually go, while national and International were moderately rise, but local remained constant long time. While local during (1995-1997) was (approximately 75-85 minutes), but national and International were (around 35-45 minutes). The British spent more minutes on local -fixed line than national and International-fixed line. Furthermore, the mobiles was (around 5-8 minutes) which that the lowest minutes of telephone calls. On the other hand, between (1998 -2002) local remained steady was 70 minutes, but it is becoming slight plummet to 70 minutes. Although mobiles slightly changed (around 15-25), it is becoming gradually rise up (approximately 25-35 minutes). National and international were 50 minutes, but it is becoming slight uplift to be 60 minutes.
The provided bar graph is
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reflect
variation number of telephone call by The British.
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According of
the bar graph are separating into 3 groups:
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local
-
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fixed
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line
,
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national
and
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International-
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fixed
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line
and mobiles.

After analysis that graph, mobiles
gradually
go, while
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national
and
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International
were
moderately
rise,
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but
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local
remained constant long time.

While
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local
during (1995-1997) was (approximately 75-85 minutes),
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but
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national
and
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International
were (around 35-45 minutes). The British spent more minutes on
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local
-
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fixed
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line
than
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national
and International-
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fixed
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line
.
Furthermore
, the mobiles was (around 5-8 minutes) which that the lowest minutes of telephone calls.

On the other hand
, between (1998 -2002)
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local
remained steady was 70 minutes,
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but
it is becoming slight plummet to 70 minutes. Although mobiles
slightly
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changed
(around 15-25), it is becoming
gradually
rise up (approximately 25-35 minutes).
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National
and
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international
were 50 minutes,
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but
it is becoming slight uplift to be 60 minutes.
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IELTS academic UK and New Zealand need who not native

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