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Type of communication used in 1962 and 1982

Type of communication used in 1962 and 1982 RNdGP
The assigned pie charts depict the information about various genres of communication used in year 1962 and 1982. Data has been calibrated into percentile. To sum up, it can be conclude that there was a rapid transformation in the modes of communication between 20 years. It can be seen that there were significant changes in each of three media surveyed. The modes of communication were revolutionized with the greater penetration of phones and computers both of th put together mode the use of letter insignificant. Letter writing which accounted for 50% of the total was the most popular from of communication in 1962, while by 1982, this figures declined drastically to just 10% which is smallest number of the year. On the contrary side, the use of phones and computers during the same period rose dramatically. The telephone rising from 35%to 60% become favourite means of communication. Similarly, use of computer doubled to 30%.
The assigned pie charts depict the information about various genres of
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communication
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used
in year 1962 and 1982. Data has
been calibrated
into percentile. To sum up, it can be
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conclude
that there was a rapid transformation in the modes of
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communication
between 20 years. It can be
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seen
that there were significant
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changes
in each of three media surveyed. The modes of
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communication
were revolutionized
with the greater penetration of phones and computers both of
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th
put together mode the
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use
of letter insignificant. Letter writing which accounted for 50% of the total was the most popular from of
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communication
in 1962, while by 1982, this figures declined
drastically
to
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just
10% which is
A determiner is probably missing here: "the smallest".
smallest
number of the year.
On the contrary
side, the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
use
of phones and computers during the same period rose
dramatically
. The telephone rising from 35%to 60% become
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favourite
means of
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communication
.
Similarly
,
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use
of computer doubled to 30%.
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IELTS academic Type of communication used in 1962 and 1982

Academic
  American English
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154 words
5.5
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