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Two price of national park

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The two charts show the price required to enter the national park from 2011 to 2018 and the number of visitors to the national park in a table. From 2011 to 2018, both the amount of admission and the number of visitors showed a trend of increasing overall. What can be seen in the two tables is the increase in admission fees for 2015 and the resulting decrease in the number of visitors. From 2011 to 2013, admission fees remained similar, but the number of visitors steadily increased. In 2014, prices rose higher than before, but the number of visitors still increased. In 2015, it can be seen that the number of visitors decreased after a significant price increase. However, when the price was changed the same as in 2016 and 2014, the number of visitors increased by a high margin. This number of visitors remained until 2017, but plunged again in 2018, the same price as 2015. Two graphs of the rate change in visitors due to the rise in prices of national parks is neatly summarized from 2011 to 2018.
The two charts
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required to enter the national park from 2011 to 2018 and the
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of
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to the national park in a table.

From 2011 to 2018, both the amount of admission and the
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number
of
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visitors
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showed
a trend of increasing
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. What can be
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in the two tables is the increase in admission fees for 2015 and the resulting decrease in the
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number
of visitors.

From 2011 to 2013, admission fees remained similar,
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the
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of
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steadily
increased. In 2014,
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rose higher than
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before
,
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the
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of
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still
increased. In 2015, it can be
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seen
that the
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of
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visitors
decreased after a significant
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increase.
However
, when the
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was
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changed
the same as in 2016 and 2014, the
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of
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visitors
increased by a high margin. This
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of
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visitors
remained until 2017,
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plunged again in 2018, the same
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as 2015.

Two graphs of the rate
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due to the rise in
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of national parks is
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summarized from 2011 to 2018.

IELTS academic Two price of national park

Academic
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4 paragraphs
182 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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