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Two pie charts illustrate the information of power production in France 1985 to 2003.

Two pie charts illustrate the information of power production in France 1985 to 2003. bE5QX
The two pie charts compare the proportion of five types of power production in France during 18 years 1985 to 2003. overall, in both years, the most significant sources of energy was oil, while other genres of energy sources generated the least amount of power. There was only minimal change over given period. Moving towards details, energy produced by natural gas comprised of 13 % in the first year and that data surged to nearly a quarter in 2003. Likewise, oil was used for energy generation to just over half in 1995; however, in 2003 it was recorder to 39%. With regards to the remaining methods of energy manufacturing, there was 5% reduction in production from both sources coal and nuclear to 13% and 17% respectively. In terms of other renewable resources, a slight inclined during 18 years which was from 1 % to 4%.
The two pie charts compare the proportion of five types of power production in France during 18 years 1985 to 2003.
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, in both years, the most significant sources of
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was oil, while other genres of
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sources generated the least amount of power. There was
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produced by natural gas comprised of 13 % in the
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over half in 1995;
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manufacturing, there was 5% reduction in production from both sources coal and nuclear to 13% and 17%
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