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Two pie charts demonstrate various motivations of workers they use in order to reach job locations by autos or by bicycle.

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Two pie charts demonstrate various motivations of workers they use in order to reach job locations by autos or by bicycle. Overall, reasons as health and less pollution made the most significant part of cycling method, while in driving approach, comfort become crucial motivation. As can be seen, health and fitness and less pollution contributed the most to reasons for cycling and both of them were accounted for 30%. Less number of people selected cycling method for traveling to work due to the lack of parking places and costs. However only 12% of people motivated to use bicycle because of rapidity. 2 people from 5 responded that they drive to work due to comfort that cannot be reached by other method. 21% of working communities prefer driving due to the fact of distance to the work. Moreover, workers that motivated by quickness and additional places in cars for their things, made more significant part of chart then people that think about their safety.
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in order to reach job locations by autos or by bicycle.

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, reasons as health and less pollution made the most significant part of cycling method, while in driving approach, comfort become crucial motivation.

As can be
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, health and fitness and less pollution contributed the most to reasons for cycling and both of them
were accounted
for 30%. Less number of
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people
selected cycling method for traveling to work due to the lack of parking places and costs.
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12% of
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people
motivated to
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bicycle
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from 5 responded that they drive to work due to comfort that cannot
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by other method. 21% of working communities prefer driving due to the fact of distance to the work.
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, workers that motivated by quickness and additional places in cars for their things, made more significant part of chart
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about their safety.

IELTS academic Two pie charts demonstrate various motivations of workers they use in order to reach job locations by autos or by bicycle.

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4 paragraphs
163 words
6.0
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Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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