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PERCENTAGE OF TOTAL MUSIC SALES BY METHOD.

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The rendered poly line graph reveals the information about the propotion of music sold through three different ways between 2011 to 2018 At a fleeting glance, it is clear that CDs were purchased the most in the initial year 2011 and the value was approximatelly 55%. Sales of the CDs fell stedily before reaching minium value of 25% in the year 2018. Next, the propotion of downloads rose moderately from initial value of approximalizy 32% to 42% in year 2014, following which they fell steadly from 62% to 30% in year 2018. Moving further to the purchase of streams. These were the least prefered in the starting year and the figure was a near about 5%. After this the strams sale rose moderately till 2015 and then increased gradually and acquired a peak value of just above 40%. Overall, percentage of music sold through downloads and CDs purchased decreased while streams increased over the given time period.
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that CDs were
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purchased
the most in the initial
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2011 and the
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was
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55%. Sales of the CDs fell
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stedily
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reaching
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minium
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value
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2018.

Next
, the
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propotion
of downloads rose
moderately
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value
of
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approximalizy
32% to 42% in
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2014, following which they fell
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steadly
from 62% to 30% in
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2018.

Moving
further
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purchase
of streams.

These were the least
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prefered
in the starting
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and the figure was a near about 5%. After this the
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strams
sale rose
moderately
till 2015 and then increased
gradually
and acquired a peak
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value
of
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just
above 40%.

Overall
, percentage of music sold through downloads and CDs
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purchased
decreased while streams increased over the
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