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the two maps below illustrates the development of the village of ryemouth between the period 1995 and now, it is clear from the graph that many sites redeveloped to new ones, according to what is shown the housing remained the same and had increased from 12 houses to 16 house, while the farmland and the forest park demolished to a golf and tennis court located in the east, the shop redeveloped to a restaurant, and the fish market transferred to a ab apartments, in addition there is a car park added next to the hotel, while the fishing port was removed from the new site, to sum up we could say that the present site faced many changes including more houses and a new golf site and a car park, while many places demolished into new sites which lead to a new village with exciting places to visit, while the instructor remained the same but the places changed as it is shown
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ryemouth
between the period 1995 and
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, it is
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from the graph that
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sites
redeveloped to
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ones, according to what
is shown
the housing remained the same and had increased from 12
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to 16
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, while the farmland and the forest park demolished to a golf and tennis court located in the east, the shop redeveloped to a restaurant, and the fish market transferred to
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ab apartments,
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there is a car park
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added
next
to the hotel, while the fishing port
was removed
from the
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new
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site
, to sum up we could say that the present
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faced
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changes
including more
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houses
and a
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new
golf
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site
and a car park, while
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places demolished into
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which lead to a
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village with exciting places to visit, while the instructor remained the same
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the places
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IELTS academic two maps shown an dthe differences

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161 words
5.0
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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0
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