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two figures illustrate the colwick art centre between 2005 and present

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The figures exhibit the changes to an art gallery between 2005 to present. Looking at the pictures, it's immediately obvious that remarkable changes have taken place on the gallery for visitor's purposes. Overall. Some new applications, such as central exhibition area, has been constructed for better experiences In the west of the maps, meeting room was separated in half and replaced the snack bar – which has disappeared to time. Moreover, a drama studio has been introduced right next to the meeting room. Also, a single gallery and a café were constructed after two individual galleries were converted. To the south of the gallery, wasteland was removed to make way for stage. Concert hall/cinema and both galleries – which in the north and east were demolished and separated concert hall, cinema and central exhibition area were erected. Furthermore, toilet was narrowed while the information desk still retained till present
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between 2005 to present.

Looking at the pictures, it's immediately obvious that remarkable
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changes
have taken place on the
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gallery
for visitor's purposes.
Overall
.
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Some
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been constructed
for better experiences

In the west of the maps, meeting room
was separated
in half and replaced the snack bar
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–
which has disappeared to time.
Moreover
, a drama studio has
been introduced
right
next
to the meeting room.
Also
, a single
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gallery
and a café
were constructed
after two individual
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galleries
were converted
.

To the south of the
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gallery
, wasteland
was removed
to
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make
way for stage. Concert hall/cinema and both
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galleries
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–
which in the north and east
were demolished
and separated concert hall, cinema and central exhibition area
were erected
.
Furthermore
, toilet
was narrowed
while the information desk
still
retained till present
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IELTS academic two figures illustrate the colwick art centre between 2005 and present

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