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The information about the Agriculture ,Industry and Services sector contributions to the India’s gross domestic product over the period of five years is depicted by the vertical bar graph.

The information about the Agriculture, Industry and Services sector contributions to the India’s gross domestic product over the period of five years is depicted by the vertical bar graph. rYB6L
The information about the Agriculture, Industry and Services sector contributions to the India’s gross domestic product over the period of five years is depicted by the vertical bar graph. The data has been calibrated in percentage. Overall, it can be seen from the graph that the Agriculture sector was showing a downward trend whereas the Services sector was showing a complete opposite trend. In case of the Industry sector, it increased very slightly. Beginning with the Agriculture sector, it was highest among all the three sectors in 1960 and it accounted for 62%. From there, it started to decline gradually and reached at around 52% in 1970. It continually declined till the end of the period and was around 12% in 2000. Moving towards the Services sector there was an upward trend and it started at 15% and it continues to increase gradually and reached at the same level as of Agriculture sector which was in the beginning of the period. Looking specifically at Industry sector, we can see that it increased gradually and contributed 15% to the GDP in 1960. It was around 20% in 1970 and then reached at 25% in 1980. Till the end of the period it then remains same at 25%
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, Industry and Services
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contributions to the India’s gross domestic product over the period of five years
is depicted
by the vertical bar graph. The data has
been calibrated
in percentage.

Overall
, it can be
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seen
from the graph that the
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Agriculture
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sector
was showing a downward trend whereas the Services
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sector
was showing a complete opposite trend. In case of the Industry
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, it increased
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very
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.

Beginning with the
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Agriculture
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, it was highest among all the three
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in 1960 and it accounted for 62%. From there, it
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started
to decline
gradually
and reached at around 52% in 1970. It
continually
declined till the
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end
of the period and was around 12% in 2000. Moving towards the Services
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there was an upward trend and it
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started
at 15% and it continues to increase
gradually
and reached at the same level as of
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Agriculture
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which was in the beginning of the period.

Looking
specifically
at Industry
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, we can
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see
that it increased
gradually
and contributed 15% to the GDP in 1960. It was around 20% in 1970 and then reached at 25% in 1980. Till the
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end
of the period it then remains same at 25%
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