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Diagram shows how bees produce honey

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The diagram demonstrates the various steps in the process of how honey is produced. There are 7 main steps in the process, beginning with the honey bees building a honeycomb to leave the nectar in them and ending when the honey is ready to be collected by a beekeeper. First the bees are build a hive, which consists of a number of cells and bees are filled them with nectar. Next the bees ought to leave the hive to find flowers. After finding them, the nectar is collected by the bees. After that the bees come back to hive with nectar and the cells are filled with nectar In the next stage the cells are fanned by bees' wing to be cooled down the nectar Due to that, the moisture is evaporated from nectar and finally the honey is poured in to the bottles and is ready to be used.
The diagram demonstrates the various steps in the process of how honey
is produced
. There are 7 main steps in the process, beginning with the honey bees building a honeycomb to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
leave
the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
nectar
in them and ending when the honey is ready to
be collected
by a beekeeper.
First
the bees are build a hive, which consists of a number of cells and bees
are filled
them with
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
nectar
.
Next
the bees ought to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
leave
the hive to find flowers. After finding them, the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
nectar
is collected
by the bees. After that the bees
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
come
back to hive with
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
nectar
and the cells
are filled
with
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
nectar
In the
next
stage the cells
are fanned
by bees' wing to
be cooled
down the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
nectar
Due to that, the moisture
is evaporated
from
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
nectar
and
finally
the honey
is poured
in to the bottles and is ready to be
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
used
.
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IELTS academic Diagram shows how bees produce honey

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  American English
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