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Total sale of 3 different method in that period

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The given line chart shows the proportion of the total music sold in 3 different ways from 2011 to 2018. Overall, there was a significant rise in the percentage of streams purchased, whereas the proportion of CDs purchased and downloads decreased over the period shown. In 2011, CDs had the biggest percentage out of 3 methods, taking up about 55%, in comparison with 5% of streams and about a third of downloads. In the next 4 years, there was a downward trend in the proportion of CDs, while the figure for streams increased by about 10%. Also, downloads rose gradually, overtaking CDs in 2013 and constituted over 40% in 2014. From 2014 onward, there was a progressive decline in the sales of downloads, ending up making up 30% in 2018. During the same time, the proportion of streams had an impressive rise, from about 15% in 2014 to above 40% in 2018, after overtaking CDs and downloads in 2016 and 2017. On the other hand, the percentage of CDs dropped steadily to a quarter at the end of the period
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ways from 2011 to 2018.
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, there was a significant rise in the percentage of
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streams
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, whereas the
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CDs
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purchased
and
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downloads
decreased over the period shown.

In 2011,
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CDs
had the biggest percentage out of 3 methods, taking up about 55%,
in comparison
with 5% of
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streams
and about a third of
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downloads
. In the
next
4 years, there was a downward trend in the
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proportion
of
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CDs
, while the figure for
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streams
increased by about 10%.
Also
,
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downloads
rose
gradually
, overtaking
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CDs
in 2013 and constituted over 40% in 2014.

From 2014 onward, there was a progressive decline in the sales of
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downloads
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up making up
30% in 2018. During the same time, the
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proportion
of
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streams
had an impressive rise, from about 15% in 2014 to above 40% in 2018, after overtaking
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CDs
and
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downloads
in 2016 and 2017.
On the other hand
, the percentage of
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CDs
dropped
steadily
to a quarter at the
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of the
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period
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IELTS academic Total sale of 3 different method in that period

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