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I'm Nguyen Hoang Anh. I'm currently a student at FPT University with Artificial Intelligence as my major at University. After finding numerous online courses about Artificial Intelligence for beginners, Coursera best fits my criteria for a trustworthy course taught by Dr. Andrew Ng, a well-known person in Machine Learning. What I find interesting about this course is I can interpret all basic terminology about AI, Machine Learning, Data Science, and Deep Learning. I also want to build my own company in the future about AI. But I do not have any essential skills to build a team. Furthermore, this course will help me find out the business aspect of AI and its applications. The certification is proof of my efforts during the course which motivates me to study every day to enhance my skill and look forward to more career opportunities. As my interest in this course, I commit to finishing all assignments and enjoying the lectures. After finishing this course, I will look for several relative courses about Artificial Intelligence. Despite my desire to learn the course, I can not afford to purchase this course due to my shortage of finance. I'm currently a first-year student so I can't afford to pay any expenses. I'm living with my single mother with all living costs, tuition fees, and other fees are paid by my mother. If I am qualified to receive financial aid, it will help me to be more competitive and more confident to apply these skills I have accumulated in this course in real life.
I'm Nguyen
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Hoang
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Anh
. I'm
currently
a student at FPT University with Artificial Intelligence as my major at University.

After finding numerous online
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courses
about Artificial Intelligence for beginners, Coursera best fits my criteria for a trustworthy
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course
taught by Dr. Andrew
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Ng
, a well-known person in Machine Learning. What I find interesting about this
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course
is I can interpret all basic terminology about AI, Machine Learning, Data Science, and Deep Learning. I
also
want to build my
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own
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company
in the future about AI.
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I do not have any essential
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skills
to build a team.
Furthermore
, this
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course
will
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help
me find out the business aspect of AI and its applications. The certification is proof of my efforts during the
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course
which motivates me to study every day to enhance my
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skill
and look forward to more career opportunities.

As my interest in this
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course
, I commit to finishing all assignments and enjoying the lectures.

After finishing this
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course
, I will look for several relative
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courses
about Artificial Intelligence.

Despite my desire to learn the
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course
, I can not afford to
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purchase
this
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course
due to my shortage of finance. I'm
currently
a
first
-year student
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so
I can't afford to pay any expenses. I'm living with my single mother with all living costs, tuition fees, and other fees
are paid
by my mother.

If I
am qualified
to receive financial aid, it will
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help
me to be more competitive and more confident to apply these
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skills
I have accumulated in this
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in real life.
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