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the chart shows the hours spent on different activities from 2002 to 2007

the chart shows the hours spent on different activities from 2002 to 2007 6aBVW
The bar chart illustrates how many hours teenagers spend each week doing seven various activities in Chester between 2002 and 2007. Overall, watching televesion consumed the highest amount of teenagers' time in all given years, while figures for bowling were the lowest. Furthermore, the time these teenagers spent in pubs or discos or watching televesion or shopping had increased, while doing homework, sports and bowling had comprised less of their time by the final year. The number of hours spent each week watching televesion started at 25 hours per week in 2002 and 2003, this number gradually rose to reach over 35 in 2007. Similarly, the figures for both shopping and going to pubs or discos were well over 5 in the first year. By 2007, these numbers had increased by 10 hours and approximately 8 hours respectively. Regarding the remaining activities, time spent on homework by teenagers had declined from 12 hours every week to only 7. Likewise, the figures for sports had fell from 10 to only about 2 hours in the last year. On the other hand, watching DVDs had fluctuated over the five years, it started at just over 10 then increased to reach a peak of around 17 in 2004, and declined over the next three years to be exactly 10 in 2007.
The bar chart illustrates how
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doing seven various activities in Chester between 2002 and 2007.

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spent in pubs or discos or watching
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by the final year.

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35 in 2007.
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10 then increased to reach a peak of around 17 in 2004, and declined
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