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A strange experience in my childhood

A strange experience in my childhood q0yN5
November, 2015, was a strange day for me. It was maybe 12: 00 at midnight at my house. I and my sister slept in the room on the second floor that day my grandpa was past away. Then my family: my mom, my dad, and my grandma came in our room and asked we about a loud noise like something that heavy fell on the floor. We told that we didn't heard anything in our room when we slept, Next, my family member went out of our room and back to sleep. I and my sister look around our room to find something that fell down but, don't have something. Finally, we fell asleep and didn't put it in my mind.
When specifying a month and year, the comma is unnecessary: "November 2015".
November, 2015
, was a strange day for me. It was maybe 12: 00 at midnight at my
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house
. I and my sister slept in the
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room
on the second floor that day my grandpa was past away. Then my family: my mom, my dad, and my grandma came in our
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room
and asked we about a loud noise like something that heavy fell on the floor. We
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told
that we didn't
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heard
anything in our
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room
when we slept,
Next
, my family member went out of our
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room
and back to sleep. I and my sister look around our
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room
to find something that fell down
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but
, don't have something.
Finally
, we fell asleep and didn't put it in my mind.

IELTS academic A strange experience in my childhood

Academic
  American English
1 paragraphs
121 words
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less than 250 words in Task 2
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4.0
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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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