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Time Spent with Parents Bar Chart

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The given bar charts illustrate the number of hours spent by children per day from different age groups with their parents on weekdays and weekends. Overall, it is evident from the provided data that children spend more time with their parents on weekend than they do on weekdays. Also time spent only with the mother is considerabely more on weekdays than on weekends. When it comes to time spent with Mom and Dad individually on weekdays, children from all age groups spent about 5-6 hours per day with their mother whereas, the time spent with father was about 2 hours (for 0-1, 4-5, and 8-9 age groups) and approximately 1 hour (for 2-3 and 6-7 age groups) per day. While on weekends the time with father remains about the same as other days except for 0-1 and 8-9 age groups where it decreases by about 1 hour for a day. Also, the average time spent with mothers is reduced to approximately 3 hours per day on weekends. In contrast, the combined time spent with both the parents follow an opposite trend to what is for mother individually. From roughly 2 hours a day on weekdays, it increases to about 6 hours per day on weekends.
The
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bar charts illustrate the number of
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hours
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spent
by children per day from
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different
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age
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with their parents on weekdays and weekends.

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, it is evident from the provided data that children spend more
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time
with their parents on weekend than they do on weekdays.
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Also
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time
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spent
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only
with the
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mother
is
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considerabely
more on weekdays than on weekends.

When it
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comes
to
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time
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spent
with Mom and Dad
individually
on weekdays, children from all
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age
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groups
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spent
about 5-6
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hours
per day with their
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mother
whereas, the
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time
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spent
with father was about 2
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hours
(for 0-1, 4-5, and 8-9
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age
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groups)
and approximately 1
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hour
(for 2-3 and 6-7
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age
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groups)
per day. While on weekends the
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with father remains about the same as other days
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except for
0-1 and 8-9
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age
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groups
where it decreases by about 1
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hour
for a day.
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, the average
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time
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spent
with mothers is
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reduced
to approximately 3
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hours
per day on weekends.

In contrast
, the combined
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spent
with both the parents follow an opposite trend to what is for
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mother
individually
. From roughly 2
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hours
a day on weekdays, it increases to about 6
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hours
per day on weekends.

IELTS academic Time Spent with Parents Bar Chart

Academic
  American English
4 paragraphs
205 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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