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the percentage of people rating certain factors as important when buying a new home

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The above graph indicates the percentage of people rating certain factors as important when buying a new home. The people who are 25 to 34 old they are not considering Parks, Shopping Facilities, Public Transport as an important factor and they are giving more preference to the Schools. The people 35 to 44 old they are considering similar factors like 25 to 34 young old people. The people 45 to 54 old and 55 to 64 they are not considering school is an important factor in that locality. And all the age groups considering there is an low crime rate factor in that locality
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45 to 54
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and 55 to 64 they are not considering school is an
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in that locality.

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in that locality
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