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Those pie diagrams provide information about how many three sectors use water sources across six countries. Overall, most countries have supplied more fresh water in farm areas than other sectors. Nevertheless, a few countries have priority on manufacturing. Agriculture has dominated water use in South America, Africa, Central Asia, and Southeast Asia, accounting for more than three-quarters of those regions with an exact 71%, 84%, 88%, and 81%, respectively. In contrast, industry companies in South East Asia and South America only represent 12% and 10%, while Africa and Central Asia are around a half (7% and 5%) from those continents each. Talking about Domestic use, all these lands utilize water below 10%, except in South America around a fives. For the remaining countries, North America and Europe have undergone a similar trend, which is approximately a half in the industry (48% and 53%). In comparison, agriculture has occupied just over a third (39% and 32%). Furthermore, chore use is under half from agriculture (13% and 15%).

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IELTS academic Those pie diagrams provide information about how many three sectors use water sources across six countries.

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6.0

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Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0

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