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This pie chart shows the shares of total world food consumption held by each of seven different food types in 2014.

This pie chart shows the shares of total world food consumption held by each of seven different food types in 2014. RBwV
The given pie chart provides information about amount of whole world food consumption by seven sort of food in 2014. Overall, the percentage of food from the animal origin, such as meat and fish have highest amount rather another types of food. In contrast, vegetable food have few amount than food according by animal. On the one hand, the amount of both meat and fish as the food by the animal source, in overall have more than half percentage from all of world food consumption. For instance, meat have a few more one third of world food consumption. On the other side, rice and bread have little amount from all of the this chart and rice have just 2. 5%, and bread have just 5. 5%. However, fruits and vegetable is a few more than from bread and rice and each have near 11%. Also, cereals have just 11. 7%. In addition, the amount of five types of vegetables food in overall, fewer than meat and fish.
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IELTS academic This pie chart shows the shares of total world food consumption held by each of seven different food types in 2014.

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