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This is an IELTS writing task 1 sample answer essay related to water usage in Australia

This is an IELTS writing task 1 sample answer essay related to water usage in Australia XDLgP
The pie and bar chart compare the information regarding consumption of water in Australia and distance factors in 2004. In the beginning of the provided chart, water consumed by residential house was on the top with 57% and merely made up highest percentage all of them, whereas water used for other purpose solely 3%, afterwards, resemblance was seen in industry water consumption and business water consumption to 11% and 10% respectively. Water used for residential apartments was 7% higher than government which was solely 3%. Afterwards, resemblance was seen in industry water consumption and business water consumption to 11% and 10% respectively. Water used for residential apartments was 7% higher than government which was 13%. Probing further, moving towards utilisation of aqua for residential categories was described as about one third of water was used for bathrooms and this proportion of Aqua was seen less in the case of kitchen, apart from that one fifth of the total consumption of water was occupied by washing clothes, however the ratio of water consumption in toilet and garden was witnessed as 15% and approximately 20% respectively. Overall, more usage of water was witnessed in the residential house, however water consumed by residential category in bathrooms was on the top in Australia in 2004.
The pie and bar chart compare the information regarding
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consumption
of
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water
in Australia and distance factors in 2004.

In the beginning of the provided chart,
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water
consumed by
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residential
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house
was on the top with 57% and
merely
made up highest percentage all of them, whereas
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water
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used
for other purpose
solely
3%, afterwards, resemblance was
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seen
in industry
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water
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consumption
and business
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water
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consumption
to 11% and 10%
respectively
.
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Water
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used
for
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residential
apartments was 7% higher than
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government
which was
solely
3%. Afterwards, resemblance was
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seen
in industry
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water
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consumption
and business
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water
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consumption
to 11% and 10%
respectively
.
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Water
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used
for
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residential
apartments was 7% higher than
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government
which was 13%.

Probing
further
, moving towards
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utilisation
of aqua for
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residential
categories was
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described
as about one third of
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water
was
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used
for bathrooms and this proportion of Aqua was
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seen
less in the case of kitchen, apart from that one fifth of the total
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consumption
of
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water
was occupied
by washing clothes,
however
the ratio of
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water
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consumption
in toilet and garden
was witnessed
as 15% and approximately 20%
respectively
.

Overall
, more usage of
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water
was witnessed
in the
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residential
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house
,
however
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water
consumed by
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residential
category in bathrooms was on the top in Australia in 2004.
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IELTS academic This is an IELTS writing task 1 sample answer essay related to water usage in Australia

Academic
  American English
4 paragraphs
211 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.5
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    Present relevant ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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