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This is an IELTS writing task 1 sample answer essay of a diagram/process showing how rainwater is collected and used for drinking water in an Australian town

This is an IELTS writing task 1 sample answer essay of a diagram/process showing how rainwater is collected and used for drinking water in an Australian town 3Ll5d
The visual depicts the procedure that rainwater is collected and processed for drinking usage in an Australian town. Overall, there are 3 main stages including rainwater collection through the drain, then water treatment happening underground, and finally pure water used for drinking in homes. Each house in the town also collects rainwater in this way to get fresh water. At the onset of the water treatment processing, impure water can be gathered and flowed through the drain. After that, this drained water pass through the filter to move off impurities. In the next step, the water is stored in a storage tank. The recent processed water continues to run down the pipe for the next treatment stage. It is treated with chemicals to make water clean enough for residents to drink. The water then continues to travel along the pipes to deliver usable water for each home.
The visual depicts the procedure that rainwater
is collected
and processed for drinking usage in an Australian town.

Overall
, there are 3 main stages including rainwater collection through the drain, then
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water
treatment happening underground, and
finally
pure
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water
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
used
for drinking in homes. Each
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
house
in the town
also
collects rainwater in this way to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
get
fresh water.

At the onset of the
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water
treatment processing, impure
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water
can
be gathered
and flowed through the drain. After that, this drained
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
water
pass through the filter to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
move
off impurities. In the
next
step, the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
water
is stored
in a storage tank. The recent processed
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
water
continues to run down the pipe for the
next
treatment stage. It
is treated
with chemicals to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
make
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water
clean
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enough
for residents to drink. The
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water
then continues to travel along the pipes to deliver usable
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
water
for each home.
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IELTS academic This is an IELTS writing task 1 sample answer essay of a diagram/process showing how rainwater is collected and used for drinking water in an Australian town

Academic
  American English
3 paragraphs
147 words
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less than 250 words in Task 2
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5.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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