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This is an IELTS writing task 1 sample answer essay featuring two graphs, a pie chart and a bar chart, related to students in Singaport for 200 to 2010.

This is an IELTS writing task 1 sample answer essay featuring two graphs, a pie chart and a bar chart, related to students in Singaport for 200 to 2010. B7kwa

The bar chart records how long students spent in school by gender in two year intervals from 2000 to 2010, while the pie charts break down where they were studying. In general, both males and females saw steady rises in years spent at school, though male figures were always higher. In 2000, there were largely equal proportions for secondary, college, diplomas and university degrees but by 2010 university had more students, largely at the expense of secondary school. In Singapore in 2000, males spent around 7. 5 years in school and females were at 5. 5. This difference of 2 years remained nearly identical over the period as the numbers for males rose steadily to over 9 to finish the period and women had narrowed the gap slightly to just under 8 years. Turning to the types of schooling, in 2000 most students were in secondary school (27. 7%) which was 1. 2% higher than college, 3. 7% more than those studying for diplomas and well above university degrees at 21. 8%. By 2010, university degrees had surged to 44. 5% and secondary declined to 8%. College students also made up a smaller proportion at 16. 3%, while diploma students rose by about a third to 31. 2%.

The bar chart records how long You use this word too often, consider replacing it withundergraduatescholarpupiljuniorgraduate
students
 spent in You use this word too often, consider replacing it withinstituteacademyuniversityhalljailfaculty
school
 by gender in two You use this word too often, consider replacing it withperiodbreadthtermmileagespandiameter
year
 intervals from 2000 to 2010, while the pie charts break down where they were studying. In general
, both You use this word too often, consider replacing it withboyguyfather
males
 and females This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :witnessed
saw
 steady rises in years spent at You use this word too often, consider replacing it withinstituteacademyuniversityhalljailfaculty
school
, though male figures were always higher. In 2000, there were largely
 equal proportions for You use this word too often, consider replacing it withunimportanttrivialinferiorinsignificant
secondary
, college, diplomas and You use this word too often, consider replacing it withacademyeducational institution
university
 degrees This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:on the contrary
but
 by 2010 You use this word too often, consider replacing it withacademyeducational institution
university
 had more You use this word too often, consider replacing it withundergraduatescholarpupiljuniorgraduate
students
, largely
 at the expense of You use this word too often, consider replacing it withunimportanttrivialinferiorinsignificant
secondary
 school.

Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
In
 Singapore in 2000, You use this word too often, consider replacing it withboyguyfather
males
 spent around 7. 5 years in You use this word too often, consider replacing it withinstituteacademyuniversityhalljailfaculty
school
 and females were at 5. 5. This difference of 2 years remained nearly
 identical over the period as the numbers for You use this word too often, consider replacing it withboyguyfather
males
 rose steadily
 to over 9 to finish the period and women had narrowed the gap slightly
 to This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:merely
just
 under 8 years.

Turning to the types of schooling, in 2000 most You use this word too often, consider replacing it withundergraduatescholarpupiljuniorgraduate
students
 were in You use this word too often, consider replacing it withunimportanttrivialinferiorinsignificant
secondary
You use this word too often, consider replacing it withinstituteacademyuniversityhalljailfaculty
school
 (27. 7%) which was 1. 2% higher than college, 3. 7% more than those studying for diplomas and well above You use this word too often, consider replacing it withacademyeducational institution
university
 degrees at 21. 8%. By 2010, You use this word too often, consider replacing it withacademyeducational institution
university
 degrees had surged to 44. 5% and You use this word too often, consider replacing it withunimportanttrivialinferiorinsignificant
secondary
 declined to 8%. College You use this word too often, consider replacing it withundergraduatescholarpupiljuniorgraduate
students
also
 made up a smaller proportion at 16. 3%, while diploma You use this word too often, consider replacing it withundergraduatescholarpupiljuniorgraduate
students
 rose by about a third to 31. 2%. 