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The given line graph illustrates the fast food consumption by Australia adolescents from 1975 to 20004

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The given line graph illustrates the fast-food consumption by Australia adolescents from 1975 to 20004 Overall, hamburgers and pizza have increased considerably during the period while fish and chips have the opposite trend As can be seen from the graph, in the beginning, fish and chips were almost 10 times higher than pizza and hamburgers, at 100. Over the next five years, it went down dramatically to stop at just above 80 in 1980 then has a recovery to stand at nearly 100. However, it can be clearly observed that fish and chips consumption has a significant decline to reach the lowest point under 40 at the end of the period. When it comes to hamburgers consumption, it rocketed to surpass fish and chips and stood at approximately 85 in 1985. Since then, it has risen gradually to hit the highest point and remained unchanged over the next 5 years ( from 1995 to 2000) Meanwhile, pizza has a steep growth from 1975 to 1990 at about 85. It then leveled off till the end of the period, reached the peak at 80 in 2000
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line graph illustrates the
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fast
-food consumption by Australia adolescents from 1975 to 20004

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, hamburgers and pizza have increased
considerably
during the period while fish and chips have the opposite trend

As can be
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seen
from the graph, in the beginning, fish and chips were almost 10 times higher than pizza and hamburgers, at 100. Over the
next
five years, it went down
dramatically
to
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stop
at
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just
above 80 in 1980 then has a recovery to stand at
nearly
100.
However
, it can be
clearly
observed that fish and chips consumption has a significant decline to reach the lowest point under 40 at the
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end
of the period.

When it
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comes
to hamburgers consumption, it rocketed to surpass fish and chips and stood at approximately 85 in 1985. Since then, it has risen
gradually
to hit the highest point and remained unchanged over the
next
5 years
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(
from 1995 to 2000)

Meanwhile, pizza has a steep growth from 1975 to 1990 at about 85. It then leveled off till the
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end
of the period, reached the peak at 80 in 2000
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IELTS academic The given line graph illustrates the fast food consumption by Australia adolescents from 1975 to 20004

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