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the diagram below compared changes the birth of two countries including USA AND CHINA

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A glance at the diagram illustrates numerous considerable differences and similarities between the fertility numbers of China and the USA during a 80 year period starting in 1920. It is evident that the figure for the birth of the USA were higher than the proportion of the birth of China. Meanwhile, the birth of China rates soar dramatically to reach a peak in the 1950s. From at a negligible at 11 percent in 1920, the number of USA experienced a slight upward trend of roundly 12, 5 percent in 1935. On the contrary, there were sharply decreased at 5 percent in 1945; however, witnessed a significant increase at 15 percent in 1950. In comparison with 50 years later, with the increase understanding in terms of populations, the rates of fertility of USA were exponentially downward trend at approximately 6 percent in 2000. It is apparent that the information supplied that a saw gradual rise from 10 percent in 1920 to 15 percent 1935, China birth rates then plunged to a low at 5 percent in the 1940s. During 1950, there were remarkably rose to reach a peak at 20 percent as compared to the later years which rates considerably declined to low at about 2 percent.

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