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This graph represent the number of students enrolled on four different course types in China in the period of 2008 to 2012.

This graph represent the number of students enrolled on four different course types in China in the period of 2008 to 2012. 0wJ5B
This graph represent the number of students enrolled on four different course types in China in the period of 2008 to 2012. Overall, every course students amount are gradually upward except literacy. Number of students from literacy gradually downward and it has the least amount of students. Fortunately, amount of people on undergraduates has the best result in comparison with 3 different courses. In 2010, it started from below 20 million, and rose to more than 20. 5 million. After that, in 2012 the number of students on undergraduates increase from above 20. 5 million to near 25 million. That is the best result in China. Below from that result is postgraduates that had almost 5 million in the beginning. Postgraduates not rose as big as undergraduates. It increase only for about 0. 5 million number of students in 2010. And in the end, it reached exactly 5 million numbers. Unfortunately, the number of people on literacy course gradually downward. It has the worst result in comparison with others. It began with below than 2. 5 million numbers, and lose all their number in 2010. That's awful result. After that, it gradually increase to almost 0. 3 numbers of students. Online training began with same amount of students as literacy course. There was gradual rose in amount of students on online training. It rose for 0. 1 million from 2008 to 2012.
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