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How the British access The Internet in 2010

How the British access The Internet in 2010 86pMx
The given pie chart illustrates the data about how the Internet used by British people during the year of 2010 for Various things (Mobile, dialogue, cable and no Internet access. The data is measured in millions. The Internet in 2010Overall, using Internet for cable by Britishers was the highest, While the least number of individuals utilize the Internet for dial up. According to the presentation, there was 15 million of people who preferred to use mobile. In term of dial up, People of Britain country less liked to use internet for this mode who was 8 million as compared to the others. As can be clearly obtained in the statistics that 32 millions of Britain masses who used internet for cable which was maximum as compared to the other modes. On the contrary, 13 million of Britishers who did not opted to use internet during the year of 2010.
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Mobile, dialogue, cable and no Internet access. The data
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Internet in 2010Overall, using Internet for cable by Britishers was the highest, While the least number of individuals utilize the Internet for dial up. According to the presentation, there was 15
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preferred to
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mobile. In term of dial up,
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internet for this mode
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was 8
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as compared to the others. As can be
clearly
obtained in the statistics that 32
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millions
of Britain masses
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who
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used
internet for cable which was maximum as compared to the other modes.
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internet during the year of 2010.
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IELTS academic How the British access The Internet in 2010

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