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This bar chart shows the percentage of Australian graduates in full-time employment four months after graduating ,between 1995 and 2001. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information.

This bar chart shows the percentage of Australian graduates in full-time employment four months after graduating, between 1995 and 2001. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information. 26Bjk
The bar chart illustrates the information about the percentage of Australian graduates, who were employed full-time four months after graduation, from 1995 to 2001. To begin with, it is clear that the quantity of employment grew during the 6 years for both genders, but the percentage of women was frequently lower than the men in work, in 2001. in 1995 only 80% of male graduates were working. And the female graduates steadily increased in 1995 from 78% to 83% in 2001. In 1996 to 2000 there was a general increase during the 6 years, but then it came down. This was especially seen in 2000, when it increased about two percent to the top, only 84%, which went down to 83% in 2001. As for male workers, these started to rise from 1996. If we talk about the number of women, it did not change from 2000 to 2001. To sum up, in 2001 employment numbers were the same for male and female.
The bar chart illustrates the information about the percentage of Australian graduates, who
were employed
full-time four months after graduation, from 1995 to 2001.

To
begin
with, it is
clear
that the quantity of employment grew during the 6 years for both genders,
but
the percentage of women was
frequently
lower than the
men
in work, in 2001.

in
1995
only
80% of male graduates were working. And the female graduates
steadily
increased in 1995 from 78% to 83% in 2001. In 1996 to 2000 there was a general increase during the 6 years,
but
then it came down.

This was
especially
seen
in 2000, when it increased about two percent to the top,
only
84%, which went down to 83% in 2001. As for male workers, these
started
to rise from 1996. If we talk about the number of women, it did not
change
from 2000 to 2001.

To sum up, in 2001 employment numbers were the same for male and female.
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IELTS academic This bar chart shows the percentage of Australian graduates in full-time employment four months after graduating, between 1995 and 2001. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information.

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163 words
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