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The table below provides information about Railways in six different countries

The table below provides information about Railways in six different countries kb8GK
The table illustrates the subway nework in six different cities with some additional data on the establishment, miles covered, and several passengers traveling in a year. Overall, the number of people using the rail system is 4000 million per year approximately. Following this Tokyo has the highest number of passengers. However, Paris crossed the longest kilometers and the smallest was Kyoto. Moreover, the London railroad is the oldest among the countries on the list. Firstly, in 1863 the London Underground system was built and composed of 394 kilometers with 775 passengers per year. Tokyo ranks first with 1927 people traveling annually. Paris was just under 736 million approximately smaller than Tokyo. On the other hand, the Kyoto started in 1981 had smallest distance of 11 kilometres with least passengers comprised of 45 million respectively. Then, the latest Los Angeles metro area was 28 kilometers with 50 million people in a year.
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additional data on the establishment, miles covered, and several
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passengers
traveling in a year.

Overall
, the number of
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people
using the rail system is 4000
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million
per year approximately. Following this Tokyo has the highest number of
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passengers
.
However
, Paris crossed the longest kilometers and the smallest was Kyoto.
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, the London railroad is the oldest among the countries on the list.

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, in 1863 the London Underground system
was built
and composed of 394 kilometers with 775
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passengers
per year. Tokyo ranks
first
with 1927
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people
traveling
annually
. Paris was
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under 736
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million
approximately smaller than Tokyo.

On the other hand
, the Kyoto
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started
in 1981 had
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smallest
distance of 11
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kilometres
with
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passengers
comprised of 45
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million
respectively
. Then, the latest Los Angeles metro area was 28 kilometers with 50
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people
in a year.
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IELTS academic The table below provides information about Railways in six different countries

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