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This bar chart shows the numbers (in thousands) of students with pass grades in different subject exams in Wales in 2003.

This bar chart shows the numbers (in thousands) of students with pass grades in different subject exams in Wales in 2003. WnK0K
The given bar chart illustrates the rates of students who pass in six subjects in Wales, 2003. Overall, Boys passed in Math were the highest, while the number of girl students overtook in History was the lowest. According to the chart, Boys did best in Maths and Science categories, around 73 thousands and 69 thousands respectively. However, they did bad at Geography, just some 28 thousands. It can be seen that the proportion of girl students surpassed in English was higher than boys, approximately 61 thousands. Moreover, Art was passed by girls, and peaked at 52 thousands. In contrast, the rate of boys studied in History was lower than girls, around 32 thousands
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bar chart illustrates the rates of students who pass in six subjects in Wales, 2003.

Overall
,
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Boys
passed in Math were the highest, while the number of
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students overtook in History was the lowest.

According to the chart,
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did best in
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and Science categories, around 73 thousands and 69 thousands
respectively
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at Geography,
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28 thousands.

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that the proportion of
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girl
students surpassed in English was higher than
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boys
, approximately 61 thousands.
Moreover
, Art
was passed
by
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girls
, and peaked at 52 thousands.
In contrast
, the rate of
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boys
studied in History was lower than
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girls
, around 32
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thousands
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IELTS academic This bar chart shows the numbers (in thousands) of students with pass grades in different subject exams in Wales in 2003.

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