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The line graph compares the revenues which four regions received from tourism industry over the period from 1960 to 2010. This income is given in billions of US dollars.

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The line graph compares the revenues which four regions received from the tourism industry over the period from 1960 to 2010. This income is given in billions of US dollars. Overall, the trend for the four continents has some fluctuations but the graph grew generally all the areas shown. It was also noticeable that there were significant changes in the figure of the income in Europe, while in Africa the tourist income increased slightly. In the year 1960, Europe’s income was close to 20 billion dollars whereas Africa had no revenues from the tourism industry. Over the following twenty years, Europe reached its first peak, at almost 120 billion dollars in 1980. Meanwhile, the year 1980 witnessed stability in the amount of tourist income in Africa. By 2008, Europe reach its high peak once again, to nearly 450 billion dollars but its income dropped by roughly 50 billion dollars. During this time, the earnings from tourism in Africa remained relatively stable and reached the highest point of 20 billion dollars. Over the 43-year period, the figure for Americas, Asia and Pacific incomes rose steadily while they earned around 100 billion dollars before increased considerably between 2003 and 2010. By the beginning of 2010, Asia and Pacific reach a top of 220 billion dollars while the Americas also had the highest point of 150 billion dollars.
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whereas Africa had no revenues from the tourism industry. Over the following twenty years, Europe reached its
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in 1980. Meanwhile, the
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1980 witnessed stability in the amount of tourist
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in Africa. By 2008, Europe reach its high peak once again, to
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. During this time, the earnings from tourism in Africa remained
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Over the
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IELTS academic The line graph compares the revenues which four regions received from tourism industry over the period from 1960 to 2010. This income is given in billions of US dollars.

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