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The below show the information about the spending of Chinese people on 5 different things from 1995 to2011

The below show the information about the spending of Chinese people on 5 different things from 1995 to2011 73Way
After analysing it can be seen clearly that 9% money was spent by the people of China on household goods in 1995 wireless by 3% on same item in 2011 in contrast expenditure of the Chinese individuals on food was hear about 1 in 7 in former year however spending of masses of China was declined by 9% on food in later yearthat 50 further that Chinese people spent almost identical amount of money on clothing in both pie charts where as this was a difference of 7% in the expenditure of masses of China on medicine in 1995 and 2011overall maximum money was spent by Chinese people on food vilest minimum proportion of the expenditure was seen on medicine in given time period
After
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analysing
it can be
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seen
clearly
that 9% money
was spent
by the
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people
of China on household
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goods
in 1995 wireless by 3% on same item in 2011
in contrast
expenditure of the Chinese individuals on food was
Consider using a past participle here: "heard".
hear
about 1 in 7 in former year
however
spending of masses of China
was declined
by 9% on food in later
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yearthat
50
further
that Chinese
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people
spent almost identical amount of money on clothing in both pie charts
Did you mean "whereas"?
where as
this was a difference of 7% in the expenditure of masses of China on medicine in 1995 and 2011overall maximum money
was spent
by Chinese
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people
on food
A determiner is probably missing here: "the vilest".
vilest
minimum proportion of the expenditure was
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seen
on medicine in
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given
time period

IELTS academic The below show the information about the spending of Chinese people on 5 different things from 1995 to2011

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123 words
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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0
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