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There is a decrease of 25 % in the data of students participating in higher education in country Z

There is a decrease of 25 % in the data of students participating in higher education in country Z xDPxw

The bar graph enumerates the number of young adults attending higher educational system in 4 countries from 2000 to 2010. At the first glance, it can be observed that A and D showed an upward trend while a stable pattern could be seen in the other two countries’ figure. In the year 2000, the percentage of high educated youngsters in D was the highest, 60% accurately, closely followed by C with 50 percent. Also, high education students accounted for the lowest number in A, just below 2 out of 5, about 2 percent less than country B in the third place. Through a decade, the tendency of nation A and B were rougly similar that both gradually increased and reach the peak in 2010 ( approximately 58% for the former and 80% for the latter). It is also noticeable that there was an mild increase in the data of young people receiving vocational education in 2005 in C before remaining the same for the rest of 5 years. 164

The bar graph enumerates the number of young adults attending higher educational system in 4 countries from 2000 to 2010. At the first
 glance, it can be observed
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showed
 an upward trend while a stable pattern could be This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :witnessed
seen
 in the other two countries’ figure.

In the year 2000, the percentage of high educated youngsters in D was the highest, 60% accurately
, closely
 followed by C with 50 percent. Also
, high education students accounted for the lowest number in A, This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:merely
just
 below 2 out of 5, about 2 percent less than country B in the third place.

Through a decade, the tendency of nation A and B were Possible spelling mistake found.roughly
rougly
 similar that both gradually
 increased and reach the peak in 2010 Don't put a space after the opening parenthesis(
( 
approximately 58% for the former and 80% for the latter). It is also
 noticeable that there was Use "a" instead of 'an' if the following word doesn't start with a vowel sound, e.g. 'a sentence', 'a university'a
an
 mild increase in the data of young This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :individualsnationsociety
people
 receiving vocational education in 2005 in C This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:previouslyprior to
before
 remaining the same for the rest of 5 years.

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