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There are four subject matters that students apply for university studies, and the bar chart reveals the number of students for each major in 1990, 2000, and 2010.

There are four subject matters that students apply for university studies, and the bar chart reveals the number of students for each major in 1990, 2000, and 2010. mBrN
This bar chart illustrates pupil applications to three American universities for various study fields in 1990, 2000 and 2010. The graph clearly shows that universities received the highest applicants for engineering in 1990 and the lowest engineering seat requests during 2010. It seems that student's not choosing biology as a field gradually in 30 years, while on the other hand, we have seen periodically growth for social work and business branches. Biology fell by half in 2000, in comparison with its 1990 candidates which were 3000 to 1500 in ten years duration. Similarly, the engineering field also dropped from 4000 new inquires in 1990 to only 2500 in the year 2000. Surprisingly there was dramatically dropped in engineering in 2010 which was around 600 applicants. Aspiring graduates showed a positive response in the business and social work area. Looking at business candlesticks, it clearly rules the market from just 2000 new aspirants in 1990 to 4000 in 2010. Students diverted towards business doubled in the span of 30 years. Even social work also demonstrate slowly rise in their educated fans by getting almost doubled new requests for admission.
This bar chart illustrates pupil applications to three American universities for various study fields in 1990, 2000 and 2010.

The graph
clearly
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that universities received the highest applicants for
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engineering
in 1990 and the lowest
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engineering
seat requests during 2010. It seems that student's not choosing biology as a field
gradually
in 30 years, while
on the other hand
, we have
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seen
periodically
growth for social work and
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business
branches.

Biology fell by half in 2000,
in comparison
with its 1990 candidates which were 3000 to 1500 in ten years duration.
Similarly
, the
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engineering
field
also
dropped from 4000 new inquires in 1990 to
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only
2500 in the
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year
2000.
Surprisingly
there was
dramatically
dropped in
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engineering
in 2010 which was around 600 applicants.

Aspiring graduates
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showed
a
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positive
response in the
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business
and social work area. Looking at
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business
candlesticks, it
clearly
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rules
the market from
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just
2000 new aspirants in 1990 to 4000 in 2010. Students diverted towards
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business
doubled in the span of 30 years. Even social work
also
demonstrate
slowly
rise in their educated fans by getting almost doubled new requests for admission.
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IELTS academic There are four subject matters that students apply for university studies, and the bar chart reveals the number of students for each major in 1990, 2000, and 2010.

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