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The chart below shows the proportion of staff employed by age in the public sector in the UK in 2015 and 2020. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the proportion of staff employed by age in the public sector in the UK in 2015 and 2020. KJdL
The chart below indicates the ratios of staff employed by age in the public area in the UK from 2015 to 2020. Overall, when we take a look at the chart, we see various age groups have different percentages between the years. A number of age groups have increased, whereas others have diminished. The workers under 21 was 14 % in 2015, however it has decreaed to 12 % in 2020. On the other hand, the employees between 21-30 was 23 % in the former year, however, it is noticeable that the percentage of this age group have made progress with up to 33 % in the latter year. Even though the staff from 31-40 have diminished from 21 % to 11 %, the workers between 41-50 have increased from 19 % to 28 % by years. Finally, the staff over 50 have diminished from 23 % to 16 % between 2015-2020
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