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the unit sales by region as of 2000 and the transition of stock price in market.

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The given information shows the unit sales by region as of 2000 and the transition of stock price in market. Firstly, I would like to describe which area in the world has the highest sales of Coca-cola. The highest is actually North America as everyone may expect. However, it accounts only less than third in total. The second highest is Latin America, which is surprizingly 25. 7%. In that sense, more than half of Coca-cola is consumed in America, combining North and South. Europe follws as third highest, which makes sense considering the life style in North America and Europe is relatively similar. Secondly, let me analyze the price per share index chart. In 1998, Coca cola marked the highest price in the history. However since then, it shifted the downward trend. Although it increased again in 2000s, the recovery is not yet completed by 2001.
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the unit sales by region as of 2000 and the transition of stock price in market.

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, I would like to
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which area in the world has the highest sales of Coca-cola. The highest is actually North America as everyone may
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However
, it accounts
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only
less than third in total. The second highest is Latin America, which is
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surprizingly
25. 7%. In that sense, more than half of Coca-cola
is consumed
in America, combining North and South. Europe
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follws
as third highest, which
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makes
sense considering the life style in North America and Europe is
relatively
similar.

Secondly
,
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me analyze the price per share index chart. In 1998, Coca cola marked the highest price in the history.
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However
since then, it shifted the downward trend. Although it increased again
The article is probably missing here: "in the 2000s".
in 2000s
, the recovery is not
yet
completed by 2001.
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