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The two tables below show the number of international students from different resource countries in Canada and the USA in two school years.

The two tables below show the number of international students from different resource countries in Canada and the USA in two school years. 7LKby
The tabular data depicts the amount of students studying in Canada and America from few countries in in a couple of academic year. Overall, it has been seen that there was a decline in the total number of international students enrolling In USA. Whereas, foreign admission rose in Canada. To begin with, Indian students admission increased by 35% in Canada, from 2100 in 2002-03 2835 in 2003-04. However, the intake of Indians in USA dropped with 9% from 200000 to 182000. Moreover, American's studying in Canada boom with 9% and about 7% increment of Canadian admission was also seen in United States. Furthermore, 5400 Chinese students were getting educated in Canada in 2003-04 which boost by 45% till 2003-04. Meanwhile, there was only 9 % rise of students in USA from 110000 to 116600.
The tabular data depicts the amount of
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studying in Canada and America from few countries
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in in
a couple of academic year.

Overall
, it has been
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seen
that there was a decline in the total number of international
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enrolling In USA.
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, foreign admission rose in Canada.

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with, Indian
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students
admission increased by 35% in Canada, from 2100 in 2002-03 2835 in 2003-04.
However
, the intake of Indians
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in USA
dropped with 9% from 200000 to 182000.
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, American's studying in Canada boom with 9% and about 7% increment of Canadian admission was
also
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seen
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in United States
.

Furthermore
, 5400 Chinese
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students
were getting educated in Canada in 2003-04 which boost by 45% till 2003-04. Meanwhile, there was
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only
9 % rise of
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students
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in USA
from 110000 to 116600.
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IELTS academic The two tables below show the number of international students from different resource countries in Canada and the USA in two school years.

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