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The graph shows the number of visitors of Tabard Towers Theme Park each month last year.

The graph shows the number of visitors of Tabard Towers Theme Park each month last year. kgEoN
A glance at the graph provided reveals information about how many people visited yo Tabard Towers Theme Park over a year. Overall, what stand out from the graph is that, attendances at the theme park can be divided into three distinct periods: January to May, June to September and October to December. Looking at the details, visitors number started at around 30 000 in January with a considerable rise until May and subsequently plunged, hitting a low of 20 000, only to bounce back to 120 000 in July. The recovery was short-lived, however, as it fell back again to roughly 78 000 before shooting up to 140 000. This was followed by a sharp drop in the amount of visitors in the last month over the period.
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Towers Theme Park over a year.
Overall
, what stand out from the graph is that, attendances at the theme park can
be divided
into three distinct periods: January to May, June to September and October to December. Looking at the
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, visitors number
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at around 30 000 in January with a considerable rise until May and
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plunged, hitting a low of 20 000,
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to bounce back to 120 000 in July. The recovery was short-
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,
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, as it fell back again to roughly 78 000
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shooting up to 140 000. This
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by a sharp drop in the amount of visitors in the last month over the period.
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