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The bar chart illustrates the information about coffee and tea

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The bar chart illustrates the information about coffee and tea consumption in five cities in Australia. The data are given in percentages, those details will be presented in the following paragraphs. Overall, it can be seen that people in most cities are usually grab a coffee at the cafe, whereas fresh coffee is the least popular in those cities. Initially, Melbourne is responsible for the largest amount of people going to the cafes with 63%, following by Hobart and Sydney with almost the same number with 62% and 61%, respectively. In the rest cities, which are Brisbane and Adelaide were observed by just over 55% and just under 50%. Moreover, instant coffees are purchased less than coffee from the cafes. However, in Adelaide, people tend to drink instant coffees more than other kinds of coffee, which is accounted for approximately 50%. Interestingly, citizens in every city consume the least of fresh coffee, the lowest number is observed relatively in Adelaide and Brisbane, which at about 35%.
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cities
in Australia. The data are
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seen
that
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people
in most
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are
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grab a
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coffee
at the
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cafe
, whereas fresh
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coffee
is the least popular in those cities.

Initially
, Melbourne is responsible for the largest amount of
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people
going to the
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cafes
with 63%, following by Hobart and Sydney with almost the same number with 62% and 61%,
respectively
. In the rest
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cities
, which are Brisbane and Adelaide
were observed
by
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over 55% and
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just
under 50%.

Moreover
, instant
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coffees
are
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purchased
less than
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coffee
from the
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cafes
.
However
, in Adelaide,
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people
tend to drink instant
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coffees
more than other kinds of
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coffee
, which
is accounted
for approximately 50%.
Interestingly
, citizens in every city consume the least of fresh
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coffee
, the lowest number
is observed
relatively
in Adelaide and Brisbane, which at about 35%.
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IELTS academic The bar chart illustrates the information about coffee and tea

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166 words
6.0
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