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The two Pie Charts show the show the most common advantage or disadvantage of visitors were New Zealand according to visitors

The two Pie Charts show the show the most common advantage or disadvantage of visitors were New Zealand according to visitors eEJRA
The Pie Charts depicts the information about the proportion of the most common pros and cons of Bowen Island according to foreigner. After analyzing, it can be seen clearly that Bowen Island has many features that tourist attraction but the people and scenery were the most popular in Bowen Island which comprised 42% and 35% respectively. Visitors felt that culture was slightly better than the accommodation which accounted for 12% and 11% respectively. The pie chart further college that high cost of living was a major problem in Bowen Island. The figure is exactly half. Almost a quarter of the guests were dissatisfied with the entertainment facilities. Finally 10% and 15% of the visitors complain of poor food quality and bad weather.
The Pie Charts depicts the information about the proportion of the most common pros and cons of Bowen
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has
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features that tourist attraction
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people
and scenery were the most popular in Bowen
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Island
which comprised 42% and 35%
respectively
. Visitors felt that culture was
slightly
better than the accommodation which accounted for 12% and 11%
respectively
. The pie chart
further
college that high cost of living was a major problem in Bowen
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Island
. The figure is exactly half. Almost a quarter of the guests
were dissatisfied
with the entertainment facilities.
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Finally
10% and 15% of the visitors complain of poor food quality and
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bad
weather.
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IELTS academic The two Pie Charts show the show the most common advantage or disadvantage of visitors were New Zealand according to visitors

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