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The two pie charts illustrate how much coffee is produced and consumed in various countries of world and third one indicates distribution of profit in different sectors like delivery, exporters, retailers and producers.

The two pie charts illustrate how much coffee is produced and consumed in various countries of world and third one indicates distribution of profit in different sectors like delivery, exporters, retailers and producers. XV39w
The two pie charts illustrate how much coffee is produced and consumed in various countries of world and third one indicates distribution of profit in different sectors like delivery, exporters, retailers and producers. Overall, the highest consumption of coffee is seen in Europe while the peak manufacturer country is South Africa. Moreover, most of the gain is allocated to the carriage department. Firstly, Europe became the topmost country to drink coffee with 41% and America is the second most country with 39%. Although, Japan is consuming less(8%), it has mass production of 18%, which is less compared to South Africa (44%) and Indonesia(22%). Vietnam is producing minimum amount of only 16%. Rest of world is occupying of hardly 12% in Consumption chart. Secondly, Profit is distributed excessively on transportation sector(with 51%), while retails stands second position at 24%. Furthermore, Exporters receive the least surplus of 10% but being the producers also, they get only 15%.
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is produced
and consumed in various
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countries
of world and third one indicates distribution of profit in
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different
sectors like delivery, exporters, retailers and producers.

Overall
, the highest consumption of coffee is
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seen
in Europe while the peak manufacturer
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country
is South Africa.
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, most of the gain
is allocated
to the carriage department.

Firstly
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country
to drink coffee with 41% and America is the second most
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country
with 39%. Although, Japan is consuming less(8%), it has mass production of 18%, which is less compared to South Africa (44%) and Indonesia(22%). Vietnam is producing minimum amount of
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only
16%. Rest of world is occupying of hardly 12% in Consumption chart.

Secondly
, Profit
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on transportation sector(with 51%), while retails stands second position at 24%.
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IELTS academic The two pie charts illustrate how much coffee is produced and consumed in various countries of world and third one indicates distribution of profit in different sectors like delivery, exporters, retailers and producers.

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